the door of Obi land

the master Obi didn’t now what to do there was chocolate metrosĀ  raining down on Obi land the cats had to do something they would never do if this never happened if they ran in it would be a war Obi screamed run a beaming purpleĀ  shined into all there eyes the pandas of panda land though they were coming to attack but they seen that they had no cat blasters so they let them through the pandas showed them to a Desert but it wasn’t a normal desert it was a purple sky one to be continued…

3 thoughts on “the door of Obi land

  1. Nice Work Oliver Good Detail From Angus LOL MASTER OBI OF ALL THE LAND

  2. Meteors! That would be such a scary situation in Obi Land! Even if they were made out of chocolate. I enjoyed the fact that your story was packed with action. I wanted to learn more about the different lands and their different inhabitants! Well done.

    My wish here is for you to read your story aloud once it is finished, so you can identify where you would like to make pauses (this is where you should insert commas or full stops).

    Keep up the great work!

  3. Kia ora Oliver. Well done, I really enjoyed your 100 Word Challenge. You have described a very exciting time on Obi Land. I like how you have let your imagination run wild Oliver! Keep on rising to the 100 Word Challenge!

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